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Tony's avatar

It was a good description of the action, ball movement in Four Square. Your character may not have been good at it but I’ll bet you were. The example is a good one to illustrate your point. Well done.

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Julia F. Green's avatar

I was terrible at four square 😂

Thanks, as always, for reading!

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Ralph Walker's avatar

Chop chop friend.

I've seen that machete up close and while it remains sharp enough to give a scene a haircut, the deep swings taken in the tall weeds of early drafts are strong enough to carve a path towards story.

Great advice Julia!

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